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Tuesday 30 October 2018

Writing part 2

Title: the three little pigs remake, the three huge dragons. first dragon’s name : grave digger, white/black.
second dragon’s name : dark sky, blue/black.  third dragon’s name : fire breath, orange/black, wolf, wolf’s
name blood scar white/red

Orientation:
This story is quite extreme so sit back and get ready to dream… In a dark forest not so far from here, there
were three dragon’s that could scare, In a hut, a wolf eating dragon’s meat, from the three dragon’s mother and
father, the dark forest isn’t quite clear but it’s blurry, full of mist and steam from the frost it may seem. Blood
scar is on the hunt for the three dragons that lives down the road where the grass grows, no one knows where
these dragons are only Blood scar, he knows who the dragon’s names are, their name are strong sounding
names but their body shows different, Grave Digger, Dark Sky and the youngest Fire Breath what did I say
they are strong sounding names but there's meanings behind these name’s, Grave Digger means strong and
brave, Dark Sky means powerful at flight and Fire Breath has the power to burn anything to a crisp. There's a
meaning for blood scar as well, it means thirsty for blood when it's near.

Problem:
the problem is blood scar ( wolf ) is trying to wipe out the whole dragon population because he hates dragon’s
because they are the most liked creature in the forest when he does this he doesn't know what's going to
happen, he thinks he will be the most loved wolf... 

2 comments:

  1. Kia ora David

    You have some really creative ideas happening in your story. I wonder if you can check the format of your post. Things seem to be hopping down to the next line when they don't need to, which is making your writing a little bit confusing to read.

    When you are introducing your problem, I wonder if you can do this without saying "The problem is..." and create an image for the reader so that we can figure it out on our own! I think that will really take your writing up to the next level.

    Thanks for getting this onto your blog today!
    - Miss Birtch

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  2. I will fix it up now or later and add a picture to it.

    thanks.

    - David

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