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Tuesday 7 August 2018

Mr Chelsea

This is Mr Chelsea and he loves roses and his wiener dogs or Dachshund , he never's take his dogs for walks he takes them for a bike ride. Mr Chelsea is a famous rose breeder and also he has a book in one hand and a magnifier in the other and he loves his roses and he checks on them every day and night.
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  1. Anonymous7 August 2018 at 14:49

    Hi David

    I like your portrait of Mr Chelsea. I can see that you really listened to the description in the novel and your portrait matches. To improve your paragraph, see if you can add in more punctuation instead of connecting all of your ideas with 'and'. This will allow for more variety in your sentences and make it easier for your reader to follow your ideas.

    - Miss Birtch

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